gave a friend to edit the second essay..

just thought of giving my second essay to a friend to edit it and see what happen to it..it was a total different essay that im so proud of because it was a really good essay...

My second edited essay: Tomorrow’s World
“God, not another one of those” and giggles, are amongst the reaction that I got when people read my essay on the “Social problems faced by youth today”, which was rightly based on drugs and smoking culture amongst the future generation of leaders. Despite the insufficient support that I gained from a certain group of peers, it is an undeniable fact that most of our senior generations have always had this niggling thought on the increase in rate of immoral activities within our age group, the pencilled leaders of tomorrow. This thought have constantly been scrutinized by them, with the introduction of various laws being amended to avoid a disastrous future that might await our race if these issues aren’t solved now. Therefore, the social issues that our generation have accepted as a mere part of our lives are actually a terrible wound that will have to be healed as soon as possible before it turns fatal.
Our generation have taken these issues ever so lightly in the face of reality. We may split ourselves, the human race into two major categories, the first revolves around a group of people who not only are well liberated but know the importance of education and the second rotates within a bunch of people who although are well educated, intend to not fully utilised the gift and status that they may acquire through their education background towards a more healthier future. I am not hinting at this bunch of people to buckle up and move forward in life because not everyone are meant to attain extraterrestrial success, instead, stand up and get noticed in their effort to improve and make our world a better place to live.
Why do we try our best to reduce our countries self esteem and respect in every possible aspect, when we ourselves never took the effort to stand up and make a difference and thrive on the foundation that our fore fathers laid all those years ago during our independence era? Isn’t this irresponsible act anything but an act of foolishness and insensitivity? Rather, I would like to reach out to all my fellow Malaysians to stand up and work hand in hand to bring our nation to the fore fronts of success in every aspect possible.
A worrying number of people think that sending their children overseas for higher studies will make them better people at the respected fields that they have chosen obviously had their reasons with all due respected to the international education methods, but why aren’t we giving a second thought at completing higher studies in our country? This issue have always raised more questions then answers with the thought that perhaps we need time to build a trust in products that are mothered in our own backyard but if someone doesn’t start a cycle, we will continue having an introvert mindset towards our education system and respected teachers. Mindset that strongly believes in the success rate of overseas courses for higher education compared to the higher education provided by various institutions in our country will force most Malaysian to looks elsewhere for opportunity, bringing a downfall to everything our education system stands for. Therefore, a strong reformation in the mindsets of most Malaysians are needed now and more then ever.
We have always had a lingering doubt even in the very people that we have entrusted our security matters as well. Our doubts have extended towards the capabilities of our Police and RELA personnel’s, so much so, we are even willing to break the rules that our set forward by them for our own security to vent our disbelief in their ability. Where is our community, our generation, the so called leaders of tomorrow heading towards? Perhaps the time has come to plant a note of fear in our community towards the rules and regulations, so that we would strongly abide them in the future as our last resort in combating crimes and instilling peace and harmony in our country.
We may have been trying our level best to improve the facilities available in our country and our government have tried to the best they could offer, but we have still not attained a high standard on these facilities. Despite having lots of transportation facilities that range from Light Rail Transit better known as LRT, to the in town bus facilities such as Rapid KL and Rapid Penang busses, we have forgotten our own moral values and indulged in our own leisure, so much so, we have stopped offering physically impaired people who need to use the seats more then us while travelling through this vehicles. So is it wrong to say that we need to change ourselves first before we could collectively move forward.
Apart from that, we have always looked upon our country lowly and always looked highly on western countries such as the United States of America, but why aren’t we striving to work towards building a nation that the world we look upon highly? This route is fairly simple that we just merely need to follow on the path that our fore fathers used to achieve independence and improve our countries reputation in many other field and criteria’s. We have always been proud of our independence and our collective battle towards the formation of Malaysia, where every individual was treated as an important part of the society. All we need to do is follow this route and build strong bond within our society and the rest will fall in the right place. Why condemn about our politicians? Why not stand up and make a difference by any means we could? We have to follow on the principal to walk the walk and talk the talk. We shouldn’t just let things go and expect others to create wonders after wonders in our country while we continue to ponder on the habit of pointing fingers because for every instance that we point a finger at someone, three fingers are pointing right back at us.
Every human being wants to make money and this has made us very ignorant towards our own social surroundings. For an instance, we don’t bother to even take the incentives to meet our neighbours regularly as we have embroiled ourselves in our day to day lives ever so flamboyantly; moving that much closer to attaining success, but this route has drastically disabled ourselves to differentiate the right from the wrong. I of all people would accept that money does a lot of bidding on our day to day life, but why do we have to be so engrossed in a mere piece of paper? Suddenly the feels like a huge stretch of road on a highway where every single vehicle is moving at such a high speed that not one soul is bothered to slow down and take notice of the beautiful life that surrounds them. Don’t we think that we are missing so many things in life by being ignorant towards our surroundings? My rant may sound just a petty talk, but we should try and glance back for a second on where are we heading towards and think of all the minor details in our lives that we have considered being inconclusive to our overall life. Do we need to make the necessary changes in our day to day life? Should we contribute in building a better surrounding? Do we need a stronger balance to move forward or are we perfect as we are? We seem to be talking highly on the green pasture that tomorrow will bring through our visions and goals, yet we are very much stuck in our current surroundings and have failed to progress at high rate. Therefore, lets all walk hand in hand to a better future rather than merely making plans for it.Let's begin a cycle of practicality in our quest for success.